CIES-TEFL Certificate Spring I 2010: Bill-Tutor-Number 1

Before I post, it seems I get the 100th post for this blog. Do I get a cookie? ^^;;

I am tutoring my girlfriend. She is at a low-intermediate level now, but I intend to change that. For our first session, I gave her homework to write a paper about her hometown, Changchun. Then I looked at the paper, made corrections and sent it back. We talked about the changes but I unfortantly robbed her the chance of correcting her own paper. Ramin suggested I mail her the rubric and do all our papers from that example from now on.

I don't think he mailed it out to us, so I had to make my own word document. ^^;; If you need an online copy, well, here it is:

Symbol	Meaning	Example
AG	Agreement between subject and verb	He have a big car. There are many different way to say something
VT	The wrong verb tense is used	She walk home yesterday
VF	There is an error in the form of the verb	She is write in her notebook now.
WF	Word form is incorrect	That is correctness
WO	Word order is incorrect	Her is name Sally
WW	Wrong word used	She came to Tallahassee already two years
SUBJ.	Subject is missing	_is raining
V	The verb is missing	I got up and _ some exercises
SP	Spelling is incorrect	She is here becus she wants to learn English
Inc.S	This is an incomplete sentence	When Mary came home
Art.	Wrong article used. Article is needed. Article is not needed	He has the headache. He is in _ bad mood. She went to the bed.
Prep	A preposition is needed. An incorrect preposition is used. No preposition is needed.	We went _ Miami. We talked with many things. We went to home.
Punc.	Punctuation is missing or incorrect	I am tall_I have blond hair.
Cap	A capital letter is needed	I am learning english.
CS (Comma Splice	Two ideas are incorrectly joined with a comma.	I am from Ecuador, my language is Spanish.
RO (run-on sentence)	Two complete idea’s without punctuation or conjunction.	I come back home then my oldest son goes to school.

Her next homework assignment is to correct what examples she can and to bring questions about the others that she cant. My plan is to have her understand this rubric so she will know how to correct her papers in the future. In the mean time, this is her paper and my corrections with the rubric.

My hometown Changchun

My hometown has a very beautiful name——Changchun, which means perennial spring.

It is located in the northeast of China. Changchun has a humid continental climate,[SK1] with hot, humid summers and cold, dry winters. The weather you can enjoy [SK2] different sceneries in different seasons. During summer[SK3] you can do[SK4] swimming, and[SK5] the winter time you can do[SK6] skating, [SK7] the temperature will go down to minus 30C[SK8] .It[SK9] is the capital of Jilin province, [SK10] and the political, economic, cultural center of the province also. [SK11] With a population of about 7.5 million and 20,532 km2 of land. Compare to Shanghai,Beijing or the other famous cities in[SK12] China, living here feeling[SK13] peaceful and natural just like Sendai[SK14] .

From the 1950s, Changchun was designated to become a center for China's automotive industry. Construction of the First Automobile Works began in 1953 and production of the “Jiefang” truck[SK15] which is the first car produced in China, [SK16] In 1958, FAW introduced the famous” Hongqi “(Red Flag) limousines.

So,[SK17] Changchun has long enjoyed the national reputation as "Film City", and "Automobile City". As a cultural city, it is proud to be the home of a number of noted universities and institutes of science and technology including Jilin University, which has national prominence.

I love my hometown very much,[SK18] I f[SK19] I have a good chance can work in there [SK20] , hope that I can make a greater contribution to my country and my hometown one day .[SK21]